Actually, I just noticed I still have the first sentence of the second ability worded incorrectly myself. It should read..."Whenever another monocolored white creature enters the battlefield under your control, you may pay WW. If you do...." Sorry about that. As I said earlier, I'm not always the best with wording myself. I makes me little nervous having someone word a card based off my suggestion, but I like to try to help my fellow card creators where I can. I'm pretty sure that, if you change the second ability to how I have it worded in this post (and the rest worded as I have it in my previous post), it should be correct. I would feel better if someone else confirmed this though. I don't want to lead a fellow CCCer astray.
Edit: As long as I'm talking about helping fellow CCCers, I was hoping to get some myself. I'm looking for people's opinions on a card I posted last month,
Sydzis, Recycled Recycler
Legendary Creature - Zombie Wizard
Whenever you discard a card, draw a card, then put a +1/+1 counter on Sydzis, Recycled Recycler. , pay 1 life, discard a card: Regenerate Sydzis, Recycled Recycler.
2/2
That which seems useless, may often be repurposed.
I spent more time on this card that I have on almost all the other cards I've posted combined. I even discussed it with other people before I posted it, which I never do, and yet it still received 0 votes. Please don't take this as complaining, I am just looking to make myself a better designer. To be honest, I have no idea which cards of mine will be well received, and which will not. Every time I post a card that I feel is "can't miss", I get 0 - 1 vote. Yesterday's card, "Piercing Vision" is another example of this, I really thought people would like my Thrun-hatin' removal, but clearly I'm missing something. Conversely, cards I post that do well I'm very often surprised by. Anyway, any opinions on the Sydzis card would be greatly appreciated. It underwent a million changes before I posted and I'm curious if anybody comes back with a suggestion similar to an earlier version of the card.
Bear in mind, I'm not the greatest when it comes to wording, but I would word your card like this....
When Melanin, Angel of Judgement enters the battlefield, exile each non-white creature. Return each creature exiled this way to the battlefield under its owner's control at the beginning of the next end step.
Whenever a monocolored white creature you control enters the field, you may pay . If you do, exile target creature. If a creature is exiled this way, return it to the battlefield under its owner's control at the beginning of the next end step.
I think the second ability should probably start "Whenever another monocolored...". The way it is worded above would allow you tap WW every time it entered the battlefield, thus allowing it to potentially trigger its own ability each turn. But perhaps that is your intention.
Jolt of Energy
Instant
~ deals 3 damage to target creature. If you paid to cast ~, you may have that creature get +3/+3 and trample until end of turn instead.
Hot Foot
Enchantment - Aura
Flash, enchant creature
Enchanted creature has haste and attacks each turn if able.
When you cast ~, it may only target a creature that entered the battlefield this turn.
Hail of Fire
Instant
~ deals X damage to each blocking creature.
Cascading Flame
Instant (U)
Cascading Flame deals 2 damage divided as you choose among one or two target creatures and/or players.
Exile the top card of your library. If that card is an instant or sorcery, you may cast it this turn.
Questing Fireslinger
Creature - Orc Shaman
Haste
Whenever an instant, sorcery or planeswalker you control deals damage to a player, put a +1/+1 counter on ~. Then, if there are 3 or more +1/+1 counters on ~, remove all +1/+1 counters from it, ~ deals damage to target creature or player equal to the number of +1/+1 counters removed this way.
1/1
Fiery Captain
Creature - Human Soldier
Haste
When ~ enters the battlefield, human creatures you control get +1/+0 until end of turn.
2/2
Fuel the Fire
Instant
~ deals 4 damage to each creature and each player that were dealt damage this turn.
Forced Loyalty
Sorcery
Untap each creature that shares a color with a permanent you control and gain control of them until end of turn. They gain haste until end of turn.
Add me to list of people wondering about whether or not my card can be a creature.
As far as judging goes...Personally, I'd like to thank the judges for their time. I'm pretty sure nobody's getting paid to judge our cards, and from what I can tell, the judges seem to take it quite seriously, often taking the time to look up rulings and wording on similar cards. I don't really have enough time (or knowledge) to judge myself, so I appreciate the fact that others are willing to.
Piercing Vision
Enchantment (R)
Creatures your opponents control with hexproof can be the targets of spells and abilities you control as though they didn't have hexproof. : Destroy target creature. It can't be regenerated. Then exile Piercing Vision. Activate this ability only once each turn.
Eye of the Roil
Land (R) : Add to your mana pool.
Landfall - Whenever another land enters the battlefield under your control, Eye of the Roil gains " : Add one mana of any color to your mana pool" until end of turn.
In that brief moment of peace, the true power of Zendikar revealed itself to me.
Lord of the Horde
Creature - Orc Warrior
Other Orc creatures you control get +1/+1.
Whenever a non-token Orc creature you control dies, put a 1/1 white, black and red Orc creature token onto the battlefield.
4/3
Sydzis, Recycled Recycler
Legendary Creature - Zombie Wizard
Whenever you discard a card, draw a card, then put a +1/+1 counter on Sydzis, Recycled Recycler. , pay 1 life, discard a card: Regenerate Sydzis, Recycled Recycler.
2/2
That which seems useless, may often be repurposed.
Edit: As long as I'm talking about helping fellow CCCers, I was hoping to get some myself. I'm looking for people's opinions on a card I posted last month,
Legendary Creature - Zombie Wizard
Whenever you discard a card, draw a card, then put a +1/+1 counter on Sydzis, Recycled Recycler.
2/2
That which seems useless, may often be repurposed.
When Melanin, Angel of Judgement enters the battlefield, exile each non-white creature. Return each creature exiled this way to the battlefield under its owner's control at the beginning of the next end step.
Whenever a monocolored white creature you control enters the field, you may pay
I think the second ability should probably start "Whenever another monocolored...". The way it is worded above would allow you tap WW every time it entered the battlefield, thus allowing it to potentially trigger its own ability each turn. But perhaps that is your intention.
Instant
~ deals 3 damage to target creature. If you paid
Creature - Orc
Mountains you control are plains in addition to their other types.
2/2
Savage Horde-Orc
Creature - Orc Warrior
Haste
Whenever ~ attacks a player, that player loses 1 life.
2/1
Skillful Axe-Wielder
Creature - Orc Beserker
First Strike
Equip costs you control cost
2/1
FLCC'S
Enchantment - Aura
Flash, enchant creature
Enchanted creature has haste and attacks each turn if able.
When you cast ~, it may only target a creature that entered the battlefield this turn.
Hail of Fire
Instant
~ deals X damage to each blocking creature.
FLCC'S
Cascading Flame
Instant (U)
Cascading Flame deals 2 damage divided as you choose among one or two target creatures and/or players.
Exile the top card of your library. If that card is an instant or sorcery, you may cast it this turn.
Creature - Orc Shaman
Haste
Whenever an instant, sorcery or planeswalker you control deals damage to a player, put a +1/+1 counter on ~. Then, if there are 3 or more +1/+1 counters on ~, remove all +1/+1 counters from it, ~ deals damage to target creature or player equal to the number of +1/+1 counters removed this way.
1/1
FLCC'S
Creature - Human Soldier
Haste
When ~ enters the battlefield, human creatures you control get +1/+0 until end of turn.
2/2
Fuel the Fire
Instant
~ deals 4 damage to each creature and each player that were dealt damage this turn.
Forced Loyalty
Sorcery
Untap each creature that shares a color with a permanent you control and gain control of them until end of turn. They gain haste until end of turn.
FLCC'S
As far as judging goes...Personally, I'd like to thank the judges for their time. I'm pretty sure nobody's getting paid to judge our cards, and from what I can tell, the judges seem to take it quite seriously, often taking the time to look up rulings and wording on similar cards. I don't really have enough time (or knowledge) to judge myself, so I appreciate the fact that others are willing to.
Piercing Vision
Enchantment (R)
Creatures your opponents control with hexproof can be the targets of spells and abilities you control as though they didn't have hexproof.
Instant
Destroy target creature that was dealt damage this turn.
It was clear from the look in his eyes that Lothar didn't have much time left.
Sorry, I refuse to make Xathrid So&So for the nth time.
FLCC'S
Eye of the Roil
Land (R)
Landfall - Whenever another land enters the battlefield under your control, Eye of the Roil gains "
In that brief moment of peace, the true power of Zendikar revealed itself to me.
Instant
Each creature that enters the battlefield this turn gets -6/-6 until end of turn.
Most will find it difficult to get accustom to such a harsh environment.
FLCC'S
Creature - Orc Warrior
Other Orc creatures you control get +1/+1.
Whenever a non-token Orc creature you control dies, put a 1/1 white, black and red Orc creature token onto the battlefield.
4/3
FLCC'S
Sydzis, Recycled Recycler
Legendary Creature - Zombie Wizard
Whenever you discard a card, draw a card, then put a +1/+1 counter on Sydzis, Recycled Recycler.
2/2
That which seems useless, may often be repurposed.